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Editor: In response to Justin Rastelli’s article titled, “Smokers Losing Rights” I strongly disagree with the stance he takes on the law. Rastelli stated that a new law that prohibits smokers from smoking inside of apartment complexes is absurd and is a violation of their rights. However, I believe that smoking is long overdue to be regulated. One of the few regulations for smokers currently is that they cannot smoke inside of a public building or office. This law may seem strong, yet there do not seem to be many strong laws such as these. I think it’s about time that legislation was proposed to start limiting smokers more and diminishing the damage to others caused by this nasty addiction. //Rastelli exaggerates the law saying that citizens couldn’t smoke in their own houses, yet the law only allows landlords to evict people who have had complaints filed against them about smoking.// Just because an individual decides to "light up" inside their apartment doesn’t mean that the individuals in the surrounding apartments must suffer from the second hand smoke. If the smoke is unbearable to other members living in the same complex as a smoker than I believe it isn’t too extreme to create a law that allows landlords to evict smokers if members in surrounding rooms file complaints about them. It seems as if thoughtfulness and courtesy are traits that are dying off and people don’t seem to care if they negatively affect others with their bad habits. This law is a ray of light that would help bring back some of that courtesy, and also aid in preventing the smokers from ruining others days with their habit.

Chris Hogan, Freshman, Business

Jaymee Sloan:

Assignment: + Fulfills criteria, although seems a bit short -Expand on your position about the law and why it should be a law +Paper fits the genre +Language is appropriate to the genre

Focus +Paper remains focused on the topic +Your position on smoking in apartments is clear +Appropriate language for the audience

Organization: -Instead of one big paragraph, expand your letter and make separate paragraphs -No recognizable intro -No recognizable conclusion +No repetition +Good use of simple and complex sentences

Support: +Good appeals to authority -Could use the article more in reinforcing your position +Gave credit to your source -Use your evidence more to support your thesis -No quotes -Could be strengthened with a naysayer

Proofreading: - Quotes should be used around the second sentence of your article - For a transition to the third sentence, you could start the sentence out with "however", because the two sentences don't flow well as they are now. - The sentence beginning with "This law may seem strong" is awkward, consider revising - Also, the sentence following that one is awkward as well - Secondhand is one word - In the very last sentence "others" should be "other's"

The main suggestions that I have are to expand on your position, use more references to Rastelli's article and separate your body into paragraphs. Overall, good job!